BULLET
PROOF YOUR SCRIPT FROM READER REJECTION
By Derek Rydall
Founder, ScriptwriterCentral.com
Imagine you’re a studio script reader. It’s
Sunday night. You’re dog tired. Dreading work tomorrow
where you’re stuck in your own version of ‘Swimming
With Sharks’. Your girlfriend (or boyfriend) has just
broken up with you – for the 5th time. Your rent is
past due – for the 5th time.
And you still have to face THE STACK.
What is ‘the stack’? It’s that monstrous
pile of screenplays sent in by aspiring writers – and
a few professionals – that you must do ‘coverage’
on (a 2-4 page document a reader creates for their boss --
a producer, agent, studio exec -- where they write a synopsis
of the script, a couple pages of comments, and a grade of
either ‘pass’, ‘consider’, or ‘recommend’).
Now how receptive do you think you, The Reader, are about
now? How generous and willing are you to overlook the writer’s
mistakes and sloppiness? How likely are you to be looking
for a reason – any reason – to say “NO”?
What are the odds you’re going to throw those scripts
into the round file or across the room – whatever it
takes -- to get through that stack and get to bed, get drunk,
or watch Desperate Housewives?!
That, my friends, is what you, the writer – and your
script – are up against.
I don’t say this to scare you (and, yes, I’m exaggerating
a bit – only a bit), but if you are harboring any fantasy
that the reader is looking forward to your script, that it’ll
be greeted with open arms like some liberator -- that they’ll
‘overlook’ your spelling mistakes, poor formatting,
weak premise, or one-dimensional characters, and just ‘fix
it in development’ – you’ll be living in
that fantasy for a long time.
SO SNAP OUT OF IT!
The truth is, your script is going to be in that stack, facing
an overworked, underpaid reader – who is also a struggling
writer himself (or herself), and they’re not going to
give you a break – unless you earn it. The sooner you
acknowledge that, without resentment, self-pity, or why-me-itis,
the sooner you’ll begin approaching this business of
writing more professionally and generate more success.
Yes, I did say “business of writing”, because
that is exactly what it is, and what it needs to be for you
to succeed. I know I’m being pretty in-your-face here,
but I just see so many writers railing against the ‘system’,
bemoaning their fate, and wanting to slit their wrists with
script pages – all the while treating their screenwriting
like a hobby or the lottery -- and not putting in that extra
mile that makes them truly competitive.
So stop it already!
Okay, enough about you, let’s talk about me. As a produced
screenwriter, script consultant, and founder of ScriptwriterCentral.com,
the fastest-growing online script consulting and screenwriting
organization, I have had the privilege of interviewing and
working with dozens of studio and production company script
readers. And what I’ve discovered are a handful of key
things that they look for when judging a script -- things
other than overall storytelling -- things that get you rejected,
or seriously discredited, before they even get into
the heart of your script.
Obviously, we can’t go into all of them here, or the
deeper story issues that can get your script rejected, but
let’s dive into a few of the basics:
KEY REASONS READERS REJECT SCRIPTS
Amateur Mistakes
Some of you already know these, but the question is “Are
you implementing them?” The major signs of an amateur
are:
- Fancy covers and bindings, with drawings, photos, and
anything other than #5 brass brads
- More than a 120 pages (actually over a 110 is more like
it nowadays)
- A non-disclosure agreement (any sign of a paranoid writer
scares everyone away – don’t do it!)
- Any font other than 12-point Courier
- Camera directions, parenthetical phrases (that’s
where you tell them how the character says their lines)
- Too much ink on the pages and not enough white space
Format
There’s something I call “The
Art of the Page”. Besides the actual story, there is
a craft to how you design your script page in order to maximize
reader ease and enjoyment. As already mentioned, you want
more white space than black ink. The less you write, the
more they’ll read. Brand that into your brain.
Think of your words like music and strive to create a rhythm
that pulls the reader’s eye down the page and makes
them turn it. One trick is to create hooks at the bottom of
the page (a question that isn’t answered, a visual that
leaves them hanging, etc.)
Bottom line, look at your script pages and ask, “Does
that make me want to read it or scan it?” and then make
the necessary adjustments to make that page more inviting.
Concept
I can’t go into this in-depth, but basically
this is about making sure your concept is fresh. That might
seem like a “Duh,” but you’d be amazed at
how many scripts are still written like Pulp Fiction, Die
Hard, and Lethal Weapon. Enough already!
Crafting a great story idea is not just about ‘hi-concept,’
it’s about avoiding worn-out clichés. If you’re
doing another heist story, you need to make sure it has a
unique twist on this tired genre. Turn it upside down, inside
out, reverse and invert it…until it yields a new angle
on the old idea. And keep asking these questions throughout.
Page-1 Read
You might be amazed at how much your first page – even
your first sentence -- tells a reader about your talent, or
lack of it. On that first page, you need to clearly establish
the tone and genre (if it’s a comedy, they better at
least chuckle; if it’s a thriller, they better be thrilled),
begin creating your key image system or motif, hook the reader
into your story, and possibly pose a central question.
The truth is, many chronic problems in your writing appear
on the first page. If you can master this page, then globally
export your new level of writing to the rest of the script,
you will take your story to a whole new level.
10 Page Analysis
Most of you probably know this, but it needs to be repeated
– because the same mistakes keep getting made in a majority
of scripts submitted. In the first 10-15 pages, you must establish
your protagonist, antagonist, the central goal, the stakes,
the thematic argument, and the ‘inciting incident’
– the event that ignites the story.
I’m not talking about formula here, I’m talking
about the reality of the studio reader. Whether you like it
or not, that’s what they’re looking for. If you
don’t hook them into the main story and let them know
what this is going to be by page 10-15, they are likely to
toss the script or start scanning it. And once they do that,
it’s all over.
I know you have so much important info you want to tell the
reader before the plot gets started – all those character
bios and backstory you labored for months creating. I only
have one thing to say: CUT IT ALL OUT! If you can’t
set up your story and characters in the first 10-15 pages,
and hook the reader, you don’t know your story –
or you don’t have one. Yes, there are exceptions --
but you’re not one of them. (Of course, you might be
‘one of them’, but we’re not playing the
lottery here; we’re trying to stack the odds in your
favor.)
You want to sell your script, right? Then stop thinking like
a writer and start thinking like a reader – because
they’re the gatekeepers and they will close the gate
and lock your script out of the party if you don’t grab
them in those first 10-15 pages.
Last Page Analysis
How many times have you seen a movie that started out pretty
good, sagged in the middle, then knocked your socks off in
the end? Despite the problematic second act, did you walk
out of there feeling like you just saw a really good movie?
Most likely you’ve had that experience. And what does
that tell you?
The ending is everything.
Don’t just let it be where your story comes to a conclusion,
craft that ending so that it’s where your story –
and all the tension you’ve built up – explodes
all over the page. Leave the reader laughing her butt off,
crying his eyes out, cheering, or afraid to turn out the lights…and
you will have a reader who recommends your script. Of course,
this is easier said than done, but that’s why they pay
us the big bucks, right? The key strategy here is to work
until your fingers crack and bleed and your head is ready
to explode – to discover that ending that blows you
away. There are many questions and techniques I can’t
go into now, but if you dig deep enough and ask long enough,
your story will reveal the best ending possible.
Don’t be impatient. I recommend not even starting the
script until you’ve nailed the ending. But if you find
yourself really stuck, sometimes writing the script can jar
the true ending loose from your unconscious. Just remember,
it’s not called the ‘climax’ for nothing.
Without a big climax, all you’re giving the reader is
a bunch of foreplay!
Top Rule to Avoid Reader Rejection
There’s one thing, above all, that you must always achieve
in your script:
Thou Shalt Not Bore Thy Audience!
Did you hear the heavenly music? I know this statement doesn’t
tell you what to do or how…but you must keep this in
mind at all times. No matter how brilliant, poetic, visual,
and commercial you think your writing is, if it bores the
reader it sucks!
Don’t get mad at me for saying that, I’m on your
side. Your writing might actually be brilliant. But if the
reader gets bored, you, your writing group, and your mother
are the only ones who will be reading it! When you become
an A-list writer, you can write boring masterpieces. But right
now, you need to write something that sells. Again, there
are exceptions to this rule – but you’re not one
of them!
And those, folks, are the basics. Ignore them at your writing
peril.
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There’s another motto I want you to post above your
computer that will keep this process on track for you:
“Write Like a
Writer, Read Like a Reader.”
When you’re writing, go for it, let it rip; don’t
think, just pour your unconscious out; don’t get it
right, just get it written. But when you sit down to evaluate
your script and prepare for a rewrite, read it like a development
executive, marketing executive, studio reader, and script
consultant – because that’s the way the gatekeepers
and buyers are reading it. And if you’re not evaluating
it that way, you are likely to miss some key issues that could
cost you the opportunity of a lifetime.
Bottom line, you need to do whatever it takes to make your
script look, feel, read, and smell professional. Do just that
much and you’ll put yourself in the top 10% of all scripts
submitted.
Remember, this is a business. To be truly successful you
need to embrace it like a business. A script is often called
a ‘blueprint.’ And it’s often looked at
like a ‘business proposal’ by execs (marketing
departments at studios have a big say in what gets bought
and made). So deal with your script like an architect deals
with her blueprint for a multimillion dollar building or an
entrepreneur deals with his business proposal for a multimillion
dollar business. These pros seek professional counsel and
work on their proposals until they are letter perfect –
BEFORE submitting them.
You, the professional writer, must do the same. Whether
you use colleagues, classes, or script consultants –
and I highly recommend all of the above -- you need to do
whatever it takes to take your script to the highest possible
level before submitting it. Like I said, just doing that much
puts your script in the top 10%, because a vast majority of
scripts are so poorly formatted, presented, and riddled with
fixable problems that they never make it past the ‘round
file’.
From this moment forward, yours doesn’t have to be
that way ever again.
Now all that’s left to do is tell a great story…
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Derek Rydall
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Derek Rydall is a produced screenwriter, best-selling
author, script consultant, and founder of ScriptwriterCentral.com
and EnlightenedEntertainer.com. Working with Universal, Fox,
Disney, RKO, and many others, he has sold, optioned, or been
hired to write over 20 scripts, a dozen hours of TV, and several
books. As a direct result of his consulting, writers have
made 6-figure script deals, raised millions in financing,
gained representation, distribution, and even starred in and
directed their feature films. He is the author of "I
Could’ve Written a Better Movie Than That!" (in
stores) and "There’s No Business Like
Soul Business.”
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